Hey everybody!!!! Whatsup? i just wrote a song, but i am not sure if it is long enuff. can you guys tell me if i should add another verse or anything. and, remember, this is rock, so don't say i should give peeps to my nigga's in oaktown, lol. anyways, here it is: Bloodshed verse: The condescending tone of hatred on your words won't help me in my life, so keep them to youself We don't need camaradarie, screw all of your condolencses Your depricating thoughts and words now seem so far away, but back then it was apathy, so let's keep the change and stay the fuck away from me! Chorus: Now it's my turn, and you seem scared; But i'll be nice, cause i won;t take you there. i chose the brighter side ans you'll regret everyday, and i'm not looking back to say...... i never put my faith in you and never will. why do i sit here and think: can't buy back time, i know it's gone away Now it's my turn, and you seem scared; But i'll be nice, cause i won;t take you there. i chose the brighter side ans you'll regret everyday, and i'm not looking back to say...... why do i sit here and think: can't buy back time, i know it's gone away so tell me what you think.

thank you
so much. You were really helpful and wish I could repay you somehow. and I think the song would sound better with just one more verse. It sounds awesome though I love the wording and the lyrics. You're a great writer! Byez!! '*:MxBxL:*/'
» MYxBLACKxLAMENT on 2005-09-06 09:55:53

its amazing might need one more verse and repeat that amazing chorus but otherwise i love it
» erinnicole96 on 2005-09-06 10:10:31

make sure you share it once your done please
» erinnicole96 on 2005-09-07 07:39:00

i am glad you let me use the quote thanks again and can't wait to see or hear the song
» erinnicole96 on 2005-09-07 11:02:28

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